In the definition paper about freedom and how wikileaks are not covered by freedom of speech I think the writer was cleaver to show the relationship of international relationships and high school. Also, in the freedom of speech paper the author made a strong emotional claim to the audience about Russia mobilizing their armed forces, because of one wrong piece of information. Another strong argument the author makes is that giving people the freedom of speech impedes our other rights like freedom of privacy and freedom to live in peace. In the paper about solitary confinement the author starts off by enticing the reader by describing what goes through the mind of an inmate in solitary confinement. In the solitary confinement paper the author uses her resources very well to get their point across and boost their ethos, for example the quote from national geographic that said that solitary confinement can be just as damaging as any of the other forms of torture mentioned before. The quote from the convict that was going to be released from prison helps bring the reader into the paper and gives it an emotional connection. By quoting John McCain the author boosts their ethos, because he is a well known politician after running for election.
In my paper I need to start with a more enticing opening scene to hook the reader before going into all the different points I want to make within the story. I need to make more of a connection between the word I am defining and the cultural element I want to argue. I need to do more research, so that I can incorporate more quotes into the paper in order to boost my ethos and make my arguments stronger. I need to make more emotional appeals to my audience, so that I connect with the reader more. Finally, I need to strengthen my conclusion by applying my point to a larger topic of discussion today.
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