Peer Edit Review

During the peer edit, Vishal helped me by showing me some places where I was Reflecting too much and was not showing the reader. In some paragraphs he pointed out where I should add some dialogue to help the bring the reader into the story, so they can become part of the story instead of just reading it. Also, I needed to put more descriptions into parts of my story, because they lacked detail. Vishal also pointed out some good examples of my good descriptions, so I could try to put more into other portions of my paper. There were a few grammatical errors that Vishal pointed out for me, so that I could fix them. Vishal did not tell help too much with the style advice for my paper though. Overall the peer edit seemed to be very effective.